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The Cruelest of Any by ~GodsLilTurnish:iconGodsLilTurnish:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Nature > Open




A mother's love outlasts the rain
It remedies her children's pain
Yet still the mother is of sin
When numbness creeps its cold way in

Through waves of heat
And through the night
The mother holds
Her children tight

Yet where is she
With good times fled
She disappears
Leaves all for dead

While the winter ice outlasts the sun
Who tends the flora, but just One
He loves the ones a mother couldn't
He cares for those that mankind wouldn't
©2005-2009 ~GodsLilTurnish
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Author's Comments

This is one of those macro shots I took whilst in Photography. :3

I wrote the poem out of sheer inspiration. I've been really wanting to write a poem lately, but it's like there's been a dam, blocking my ideas.

That dam kind of broke, thus the birth of this poem. Forgive it if it's not that great, please...

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~qt4u2nv Dec 9, 2005, 11:59:07 AM
Wooo, AWESOME poem! :w00t:

Buuuuut, I would reword the fifth line to something like:

Through the waves of heat

'Heat waves' disrupts the flow of your lovely little poem. It's like a jagged rock in the middle of a bunch of smooth ones. :)

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See also: OBSESSED.
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~GodsLilTurnish Dec 9, 2005, 12:07:32 PM
"The waves of heat" holds an extra syllable, and it jags up the stanza, too. Maybe "Through waves of heat"? Yeah.

You were definitely on a better track, though. :D Thanks much mah sista!! :glomp:

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I would rather see people in heaven with broken toes, because I stepped all over them, than see people in hell with perfect feet because I was too afraid of offending them.
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~GodsLilTurnish Dec 9, 2005, 12:08:21 PM
Thanks much! :blush: I really do appreciate the comment! :3

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I would rather see people in heaven with broken toes, because I stepped all over them, than see people in hell with perfect feet because I was too afraid of offending them.
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~SaraGreenwalt Dec 9, 2005, 12:11:08 PM
cool picture. did you edit it to get that reflection? nice macro shot. i love macro!
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~Guy56732 Dec 9, 2005, 12:13:35 PM
Nice poem, pic is good too =)

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Glory to the brave.
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~GodsLilTurnish Dec 9, 2005, 12:22:09 PM
Thanks much! Naw, I didn't edit it; I just kinda took it for what it was. xD;;;

Kinda does look Photoshop'd, doesn't it? >.>

But thanks so much! :glomp:

....

99-cent store.

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I would rather see people in heaven with broken toes, because I stepped all over them, than see people in hell with perfect feet because I was too afraid of offending them.
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~RainShomet Dec 9, 2005, 1:02:39 PM
I'd be moved if you didn't get your point accross several poems ago. >_>

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~ I Am ~ I Know ~ I Love ~
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~Soot-Whisper Dec 9, 2005, 2:46:20 PM
Wow. It has a deep meaning to it, that I personaly love. The picture and the poem look great! Deserves a fav!;)

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HERES where you'll find art:
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